Please Re-arrange it into a format like so...
Concept Outline: ( few short paragraphs giving overview to the game)
Pitch/Tag Line: (ie) "Snowy, The Game That Kills!"
Story: (says itself)
Universe: (says itself)
GamePlay Outline: (says itself)
Technical Specs/Game Engine(s) Specs
Lose the personal touch to the document:
Gameplay * This game original concept and work started before the existence of s2games. But, upon the announcement of savage the development slowed to a halt.
After years of refining and development we release the new gameplay that will take RTSS style of gameplay to the next level - I don't need a history lesson!
The objective won't be destruction of enemy's "Stronghold/Lair", but elimination of all opposing forces. - Don't compare your game to savage, only the engine is the same, which i assume will look radically different from savage and therefore have no bearing on that game.
o Gravity multiplies mass. - While I think I know what your getting at I have no idea what this real is supposed to mean.
That's all I can see with these sleepy eyes atm.
Hope it helps.... and isn't to harsh